كاتب الموضوع :
لوشة العزاوي
المنتدى :
ENGLISH FORUM
good evening
this poem is great I really loved it
I mean the subject is just sooo dear to my heart and I loved that you put some rhythm
the language was very good and there were some beautiful visualizations
but there were also some grammer errors
the colors are brighter and the air softer should be (Is softer)
if carry it with you ,you never become older
should be ( if you carry it with you, you will never become older)
It's short season should be it's (a short season)
but in whole ,I loved it ,specially the revealing of the mystery in the end
I wish you all the luck in the competition
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